Talk:Living in a Ghost Town

Latest comment: 4 months ago by Uncle G in topic Criticizing or Criticising
Former good article nomineeLiving in a Ghost Town was a Music good articles nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There may be suggestions below for improving the article. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
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DateProcessResult
October 13, 2020Good article nomineeNot listed

GA Review edit

This review is transcluded from Talk:Living in a Ghost Town/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 05:45, 3 October 2020 (UTC)Reply


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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Nice to see such a recently released song in the nominations list; I will review this soon! --K. Peake 05:45, 3 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead edit

  • Change recorded date to 2019–2020 in the infobox
  •   Not done Why would this be better?
  • Because not only is the exact date of the months not fully sourced, but it was recorded between 2019 and 20. --K. Peake 06:56, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  •   Done Excellent point.
  • Where are the studios sourced from? If it is part of the credits/personnel, then add that to the section.
  •   Done Removed as unsourced.
  • Remove wikilink on Matt Clifford since his article does not exist
  •   Done
  • Remove [1] from the infobox since you do not add refs; however, I notice that The Glimmer Twins are the only producers not included in the personnel; mistake here?
  •   Done Matt Clifford was not sourced but the personnel section explicitly says that Jagger and Richards produced the song.
  •   Not done I am not going to link someone to Google's surveillance network. Why would I do that?
  • There is literally a template for embedding music videos in infoboxes, look through so many GAs and you will see it. --K. Peake 06:56, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • I know there is. I'm not going to add that.
  • Nothing there says that music video links are obligatory and certainly nothing about YouTube. I am not going to add a link to YouTube: why are you insisting on this?
  • The lead is currently too short since it is missing a good amount of information such as the genres of the song and chart performance; I will order how to add this appropriately below and it should be two paragraphs instead of one para.
  • The second sentence should instead be "The song was produced by..." but this needs to be written out in the first section since the sources are there for it
  •   Not done I don't understand you.
  • I mean to write out who the song's producers are in prose --K. Peake 06:56, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • I don't think that needs to be in the lead, especially since there isn't any running text about Don Was.
  • The lead is currently too short, that's the issue --K. Peake 09:52, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • It now covers some material about every section below.
  •   Done
  • "making it the first Rolling Stones single" → "This made the song the Rolling Stones' first single" with this being a new sentence instead
  •   Not done
  • Should not be part of the sentence and do not have too many uses of it --K. Peake 06:56, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • I don't understand you. If this is a small thing, please just amend it yourself.
  • The four year statement in this sentence is not sourced in the body; fix this
  •   Done
  • You should follow this with a new sentence about the genres of the song and add lyrics information if you can sourced that in the body first
  •   Done
  • Start a new para here and the opening sentence should start as ""Living in a Ghost Town" was recorded during..." since this should not only come before the critical reception, but should be a different sentence
  •   Not done
  • This is how things are supposed to be ordered --K. Peake 06:56, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Source?
  • Well think about it, the lead has things ordered in a very similar way to the order of sections and recording obviously comes before reception --K. Peake 09:52, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Rearranged
  • "for a forthcoming studio album that the band has been working on since 2015." → "of the Rolling Stones in 2019, ultimately being finished the following year."
  •   Not done I don't understand you.
  • I mean to change that part of the sentence --K. Peake 06:56, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Again, if this is some small thing, I can't understand what you want: just change it yourself.
  • "The song has received positive reviews from critics" → "The song received generally positive reviews from music critics" with the appropriate target and add what was praised/commented on
  •   Done
  • The following sentence should mention some of the notable chart positions of the song
  •   Not done this is arbitrary
  • No it is not, since the lead is too short currently --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Saying that the lead is short is one thing but the remedy is not to insert original research.
  • I literally never said that... --K. Peake 09:52, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • What are objectively "notable chart positions"? This is the point I'm making.
  • Last sentence of this para should be about the accompanying music video
  •   Done

Recording and composition edit

  • Retitle to Background and composition
  •   Not done No need
  • This is more about background on the song than recording, though they are very similar so change to background and composition --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • I disagree. If this matters so much, someone else can change it.
  • "Since 2017, the band had been" → "Since 2017, the Rolling Stones had been"
  •   Done
  • "but had to stop" → "but had to stop touring in 2020"
  •   Done
  • "to raise money" → "helping raise money"
  •   Done
  • "during the crisis." → "during the pandemic."
  •   Not done: overuse of the word "pandemic"; no need to repeat it over and over again
  • "On 23 April, the band released 'Living in a Ghost Town' online." → "On 23 April of that year, the band released "Living in a Ghost Town" as a single." with the target
  •   Not done I have no clue why you keep writing "with the target"...?
  • When I write "the target", that refers to directing word(s) to a certain Wikipedia page --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • That makes less sense: what are "directing words"?
  • I mean the words being DIRECTED to a Wikipedia article, it is like a wikilink basically. This should not be hard to understand... --K. Peake 09:47, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Sometimes you include this language and sometimes you just write "finished remotely and is their" → "finished remotely, marking their" so that makes it confusing. I have never seen anyone refer to "directing words" in Wikipedia.
  • "finished remotely and is their" → "finished remotely, marking their"
  •   Done
  • "Jagger claims to have" → "Mick Jagger, a founder member of the Rolling Stones, claimed to have" with the appropriate wikilink
  •   Done mostly
  •   Done
  • "being a ghost existing after" → "being a ghost after"
  •   Done
  • "labeled 'Living in a Ghost Town' as" → "labeled "Living in a Ghost Town" as"
  •   Not done this is written in British English
  • You are supposed to use the same speech marks ("") in British English --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  •   Not done en-GB
  • "'a slow-paced chug with a tint of reggae'," → ""a slow-paced chug with a tint of reggae","
  •   Not done en-GB
  •   Done
  • "'vintage reggae flavour' in" → ""vintage reggae flavour" to"
  •   Not done en-GB
  • "'stabbing, echoing organ'," → ""stabbing, echoing organ"," with the target
  •   Not done en-GB, common term
  •   Not done Valid redirect.
  • It does not meet MOS:LINK2SECT, since it is a redirect to a main article so I am disputing you here --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • It's not under the "Metal Hammer" brand or at that domain name.
  • You are supposed to have it directed to the non-redirect... --K. Peake 09:47, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Does WP:TARGET say that? Where are you getting this?
  • "calling it 'a relaxed piece of reggae-infused rock'." → "called it "a relaxed piece of reggae-infused rock"." with the target
  •   Not done everyone is familiar with rock music and adding links inside of quotations is discouraged
  • It is fine in this context and genres are supposed to be targeted to themselves --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Again, "rock" is a very common term.
  • In the context of it being the specific genre, this target is appropriate --K. Peake 09:48, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Add some info about the lyrical content of the song after this genre description
  •   Not done There already is some, I don't have anything else sourced to add here.

Release and reception edit

  • "The initial release was digital-only, accompanied" → "The song was initially released for digital download and streaming as a single on 23 April 2020, being accompanied"
  •   Done
  •   Done
  • "with footage taken from across the world of empty city streets." → "with footage of empty city streets that was taken from across the world."
  •   Done
  • "The band have plans to resume No Filter once the pandemic subsides" → "Once the pandemic subsides, the Rolling Stones plan to resume the No Filter Tour"
  •   Done
  • "the single is a means of keeping" → "the single was done to keep"
  •   Not done This is less clear: it's the release not the "doing" of the single that is relevant.
  • "promoting the album's worth of new material" → "for promotion of their upcoming album"
  •   Done
  • "and purple vinyl single exclusive" → "and purple vinyl, both of which are exclusive" with the target
  •   Done
  • "online store and an orange vinyl single for" → "online store, and an orange vinyl for sale by"
  •   Done
  • Are you sure the releases are still forthcoming since they are apparently out now?
  • No.
  • Make sure this is updated in prose then --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  •   Done
  •   Done
  • "it 'their best new song in years', with" → "it the Rolling Stones' "best new song in years", placing"
  •   Done
  • Remove wikilink on reggae
  •   Done
  •   Done
  • "that the pacing and mood" → "that the song's pacing and mood"
  •   Done
  • "of being in lockdown." → "of being in lockdown during the pandemic."
  •   Done
  • "agrees that the single" → "opined that the single"
  •   Done
  • "'right on time'" → ""right on time","
  •   Not done en-GB
  • The NME review should come last in this para since it is the most critical review
  •   Not done How does that make sense?
  • Because reviews come in order from most positive to most negative if it is generally positive, or the other way around if generally negative --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Source?
  • This is an essay, there is nothing normative here.
  • "a 'a rushed and half-baked comment on our current predicament'," → ""a rushed and half-baked comment on our current predicament","
  •   Not done en-GB
  • "as 'Jagger perhaps doesn’t" → "noting that "Jagger perhaps doesn't"
  •   Not done en-GB
  • "fishnet safety packages'." → "fishnet safety packages"."
  •   Not done en-GB
  • "of the week and" → "of the week, and"
  •   Not done en-GB
  • The comma is needed here grammatically --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Good point: sorry for that.
  • "recommended this track." → "recommended the track."
  •   Not done en-GB
  • It is more encyclopaedic to write "the track" --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • I disagree but my reasoning above was faulty again.
  •   Done
  • "but it 'rocks harder" → "but "rocks harder"
  •   Not done en-GB
  • The word "it" is not needed here --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Wow. Again, I was just wrong.
  • "song to rock'." → "song to rock"."
  •   Not done en-GB
  • "On 3 July," → "On 3 July 2020,"
  •   Done
  •   Done
  • "after the song was released on vinyl in several different special editions," → "after several different special editions were released for the song,"
  •   Done
  • "on this chart and the artist with the" → "on the chart and giving them the"
  •   Done
  •   Done
  • "than in the past few weeks" → "than they were for the past few weeks"
  •   Done
  • "in the German Charts is purely sales-dependent and does" → "for the German Charts being purely sales-dependent; it does"
  •   Done
  • Add more chart positions that are notable here, such as Scotland and Hungary
  •   Not done How are some "more notable"? Where is any narrative text about the Hungarian charts?
  • No, but you can write out in prose about the song reaching positions on charts --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • That's redundant and doesn't give any meaningful context. The German charts one does but I don't have any for the Hungarian charts.
  • The chart positions are obviously notable when they are a high ranking, this should be clear --K. Peake 09:46, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • There's still nothing to write.

Personnel edit

  • Where are the studios?
  •   Not done I don't know and studios aren't persons
  • There is no source for the Rolling Stones credits; add at the top of the section "Credits adapted from..." and then provide the appropriate source there
  •   Done
  • Where are the mentions of the Glimmer Twins members?
  •   Done
  • Remove redundant wikilinks
  •   Not done: it's fine to link to someone's name in a list; otherwise, the list would look unbalanced
  •   Done

Charts edit

  • Chart performance for 'Living in a Ghost Town' → Chart performance for "Living in a Ghost Town"
  •   Not done en-GB
  •   Done

Release history edit

  • Release formats for 'Living in a Ghost Town' → Release dates and formats for "Living in a Ghost Town"
  •   Done
  • The region col is missing, which should be the first one
  •   Not done "Missing"? "Should"? Based on what?
  • This is how release history tables are supposed to be laid out, look through many GAs and you will see this; it is important to list where the releases were --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Source?
  • Look at the release tables throughout articles; it looks messy in the state you currently have but needs fixing --K. Peake 09:43, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • There is nothing messy about this table. Adding a useless column would make it more messy.
  • Ref col is missing too, which should be the one after the label col
  •   Not done That is ugly, unnecessary, less accessible and I will never do that: the rows are properly sourced.
  • This is outdated format that you are using now, though --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Format → Format(s)
  •   Not done
  • There are multiple formats in the same rows so this must be done --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Source?
  •   Done
  •   Not done
  • It is not currently written correctly --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • I copied and pasted what you wrote above.
  • Make sure the appropriate refs are invoked in the col
  •   Not done What are you talking about? There is nothing to be references in "in the col"???
  • This is for when you have adding the col --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • I can't even parse that sentence. What are you talking about "when you have adding the col"? I sincerely can't even read that.
  • Col means column in a table, I thought this was an obvious abbreviation --K. Peake 09:43, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • I realize that "col" means "column": "when you have adding the column" is nonsense. What does "when you have adding the column" mean?

See also edit

  •   Not done: this is not an improvement
  •   Not done: this is not an improvement
  • You are not supposed to give full context for any of the articles under see also --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

References edit

  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
  •   Not done: what are you talking about "using the tool"?
  • Click on "Fix dead links" under Revision history
  •   Done
  •   Done
  •   Not done: it's fine to link to the source in the citation
  • For all instances that I put this, it is because sources should only be wikilinked to once
  • Source?
  • Overlink page discourages linking again for sources --K. Peake 09:45, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Source (again)?
  • Zane Lowe should be authorlinked on ref 7, and lay his name out in the same manner as the other authors
  •   Not done: this is not an improvement
  • It needs to be laid out with last followed by first name for consistency and any authorlinking is good to provide more context --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Not even sure why I wrote that, since I did what you asked.
  • Authorlink Will Hodgkinson on ref 9
  •   Done
  •   Not done: valid redirect
  • Addressed this earlier in the article review
  • See above
  • WP:OVERLINK of GQ on ref 11
  •   Not done: it's valid to link to the source
  • WP:OVERLINK of Rolling Stone on ref 12
  •   Not done: it's valid to link to the source
  • Remove redundant wikilink on Super Deluxe Edition for ref 13
  •   Not done: redundant to what...?
  • WP:OVERLINK of Vulture on ref 14
  •   Not done: it's valid to link to the source
  • Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 17 and cite Stereogum as website instead
  •   Done: for quotation, why use "website" instead of "publisher"?
  • Because Stereogum is italicised as its article makes clear, so should not be cited as a publisher --K. Peake 07:13, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • If so, then it should be in the running text as well, which I changed
  • Are you sure ref 38 is required; if yes, then target AllMusic Guide to AllMusic
  •   Done

External links edit

  • Remove AOTY, MusicBrainz, RYM and MSN.com
  •   Not done: why would I do that?
  • How is MusicBrainz "useless" but Discogs isn't? You aren't explaining yourself.

Final comments and verdict edit

  •   On hold after I finished my comments today easily just like I set out to do, hopefully this can become a GA on this very day and I understand the numerous mistakes since you are not a heavily experienced editor! --K. Peake 11:35, 3 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
    Kyle Peake, ..."not a heavily experienced editor"...? ―Justin (koavf)TCM 03:06, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
    Koavf It looks like you do not have much experience in GANs, that was not meant as a diss. And I have made responses to your comments above. --K. Peake 06:56, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
    Kyle Peake, I didn't think you were being disrespectful: it is just one of many things that is unintelligible to me on this page. Responded myself, including several changes. Thanks. ―Justin (koavf)TCM 08:24, 11 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
    Koavf Sorry but I am going to have to  Fail this article because not only has it been on hold for too long, but you have not implemented numerous changes properly even after I have gone through them on the review page. --K. Peake 08:15, 13 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
    Kyle Peake, Well, you left several items above outstanding. It's unfortunate that you think that this article can't be good without a link to YouTube but I'm never going to include that, so c'est la vie. ―Justin (koavf)TCM 15:18, 13 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Criticizing or Criticising edit

Which is the correct spelling. GoodDay (talk) 16:13, 10 December 2023 (UTC)Reply

This article uses Oxford spelling, which is -ize. See Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Spelling/Words ending with "-ise" or "-ize". ―Justin (koavf)TCM 16:19, 10 December 2023 (UTC)Reply
It's an article about a British subject so should use the variant more widely used in British English. While the OED accepts both variants, criticise is by far the predominant spelling in Br. English and -ize is generally viewed, correctly or otherwise, as US English (it isn't, but -ise the widely used form). Oxford is something of an outlier in this respect, as with things like the Oxford comma; almost any publication, company or newspaper style guide in the UK would require -ise. Wikipedia's MoS makes it clear that language in articles should be consistent (Br. spelling is used elsewhere in the article) and that articles with a tie to a specific country should use the style of that country. My contention is that while both variants are accepted, the version with the (by far) wider use in Britain should be used.Neilinabbey (talk) 16:25, 10 December 2023 (UTC)Reply
cf. {{Use Oxford spelling}}, MOS:VAR, and MOS:RETAIN. It is unacceptable to change English varieties that are established without prior consensus. ―Justin (koavf)TCM 16:28, 10 December 2023 (UTC)Reply
Now that you've both had your say it would be a good idea to stand back and let others have their say. Phil Bridger (talk) 16:37, 10 December 2023 (UTC)Reply
Either spelling is perfectly acceptable, but per MOS:RETAIN the long standing use of 'criticizing' should be retained until there is a consensus to change it on the talk page. Personally I would prefer to change it, but not strongly: Oxford spelling is a perfectly acceptable variant but a slightly unusual one, even within the University of Oxford (which I know well). Jonathan A Jones (talk) 16:51, 10 December 2023 (UTC)Reply
Given the far greater majority of -ise usage in UK English I would prefer to see it be changed, especially since we are talking about one occurrence of a single word, which I don’t think is capable of establishing “consistency” as discussed in MOS:RETAIN. Celjski Grad (talk) 19:28, 10 December 2023 (UTC)Reply

They're both correct for British English, and -ise should not be enforced as the One True Spelling. In fact, they're both still productive. This must have been hashed out on the manual of style talk pages several hundred times, by now, surely? Special:Diff/617099087 seems to bear out that we've had this discussion at least once. If the person actually doing the article writing work has decided upon Oxford spelling (which is a bit of a misnomer since it isn't confined to Oxford), don't go style-warrioring it to something else. Uncle G (talk) 00:32, 11 December 2023 (UTC)Reply